Draft talk:Otodental syndrome

The introduction mentions the phenotype Globodontia, I feel like maybe a picture of this phenotype can better help understand the severity of the phenotype. In general, the more Wikipedia articles you link, the easier it would be to comprehend the terms not commonly used. This is just a suggestion, not required, but maybe adding a short sentence or two describing/ defining the importance of the different types of teeth mentioned- Molar, incisors, canine, and premolars, can also help comprehend the severity of the disease.

The mechanisms mention haploinsufficiency? What is it? Why is this important? Perhaps use Wikipedia to help thus linking Wikipedia article. How likely is it to get all the symptoms mentioned in the symptoms section? The way it is written, it appears all symptoms occur all the time. Is that the intension? When do these symptoms occur? How common and severe are the symptoms?

The diagnosis section is short but if that is all that is known then it is good.

Treatment and Prognosis section is good. I would add more detail if available.

Overall, the Wikipedia article is good. I think once you use the appropriate “Wikipedia” formatting you are off to a great start. Let me know if you need help with “Wikipedia” formatting.

Hetal Patel

I think once you link the terms to other wiki pages it will be better, since you have a lot of medical terms in your wikipedia article. Other than that, recent research and references I guess you still need to get to. Try to include pictures of the enlarged canines or other relevant pictures, it will definitely make it better to have that on there.

I found the article easy to follow and clear and detailed in general. Good job explaining the symptoms from their medical terminologies. I would suggest maybe mention specific tests that they need to take in diagnosis, if you have access to that information.

Seira D'cruz — Preceding unsigned comment added by Seiradcruz (talk • contribs) 15:09, 8 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, I think the wikipedia article is pretty thorough, and I can see it being very useful for those who want an overview of the disease. Some things I would suggest is to link the key terms throughout the article that already have pages. I think this would help to provide some background for readers that are still learning about or unfamiliar with the related terms. I would definitely include pictures of normal teeth vs. people with the disease. In the symptoms section, if you could bold the symptoms before you convey the definition, I think it would be visually pleasing for the reader. I see that you haven't yet gotten to recent research - in this section I would convey information that is still trivial and still needing further research to evaluate. I noticed that some areas are bulleted but not broken down so that each bullet is on its own line. This is a quick formatting fix and I am sure you are aware of that, but I wanted to mention it just in case.

Zjsyed (talk) 17:30, 8 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Wikipedia format does not have a heading for the intro
Link to other wikipedia articles
Use wiki formatting for your citations, look at other pages or use cite button
Try to make your intro (in particular) more accessible to a lay reader
You have a lot of really great information here. It's really coming together. Once you have done your formatting, editing and your recent research, this is going to be great.

Sweiner02 (talk) 01:34, 9 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Good job. This is going to be an article soon. B14709 (talk) 22:37, 7 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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